This might sound crazy, but I almost feel like we need that trailer type voice for this. And maybe Natalie can achieve that similar to what she did for "SPREAD THE WORD Bible.Is App"
I agree that the voice needs to be more announcery for sure...definitely not anything close to what LUMO has but yeah.
I also kind of feel like the music is a bit slow in the first half...idk, maybe I've been tainted by the original trailer haha
maybe? I mean the whole thing is pretty slow, the layout and structure is more of an infomercial than an engaging trailer and doesn't really lend itself to being upbeat. I kind of like it starting slower and building up but maybe it's too slow.
With that in mind, I think it works. I think I was just expecting it to be upbeat, but no one else will really have an expectation going into it if we don't call it a "trailer"
i could also re-edit the music to use some of the slightly more upbeat parts toward the beginning. that might help
whatever you think!